Unicef-Miracle Aids Campaign_2

I want to communicate to the consumen of Miracle & Melliderma(beauty/aesthetic clinic) if they wanna beauty, they doesn't need to endangerous their live,... because Condition and Tools that used at the clinic must be hygiene and steril,...if not,...the consumen could infected HIV/AIDS,...and they could killed because of it.

i made this Ad in 2 version,...enjoy and critique are welcome please.

Buat sodara2 DA ku tersayang,...heheheh,... ati2 lo yaa ama HIV/AIDS,...palagi yang cewe' yang sering ke beauty clinic buat perawatan kulit,... pilih clinic yang mengutamakan Hygiene ama Sterilitas alat2 yang digunakan,... karena semua itu menjamin kalian ga akan terjangkit/tertular virus HIV/AIDS,....hiihihihihih tatuuuuttt.

Ok,..Guys,...Commentnyaaa yaaaa,....Kritik juga boleh.
Thx